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This logline feels like it jumps in halfway through the story and then gives away the 3rd act.
I'd like to know at what point does the ant meet and then learn to love his estranged father? Is this all in the first act? I would try to tighten the logline up up a little and then clarify what the Ant's actual goal is. is it to create a relationship with his father or to stop the two colonies going to war.
"When Allan the Ant learns that his estranged father is from a rival Ant colony he must stop the rising tensions between the two colonies if he has any hope of rekindling a relationship"
Obviously this isnt perfect and may not fit your story at all but its just an example
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