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This seems a little 'wordy' and doesn't particularly flow. It also doesn't particularly tell us a story. Why are there disputes? Why has she become involved in the gang politics? Need to know her journey really and what will lead her to act where as here you have just told us she will be betrayed but we don't know why she would be involved.
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