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In order to make her goal clearer - what exactly is 'home'? Where, if she was kidnapped simply 'en-route' to Earth, will she be safe from the kidnappers? Sounds like an exciting story otherwise, good work!
"Breed or Die"
Why is she being sentenced to death?
I think cleaning this logline up would help greatly. Something like "An intergalactic diamond huntress kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route to Earth, must fight for her freedom in order to make it home before she is sentenced to death."
It's not perfect, but is punchier, in my opinion.
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