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Correct grammar! Best you proof read your material:
Here is your logline corrected:
To overcome her fear of the outside world as a result of her mother's death and rape, an orphaned girl, who suffers from hallucinations, accepts the help of a stranger and moves in with him.
That aside this logline lacks its most vital component - a goal. What does the girl want to achieve in practical terms?
Lastly, the structure and wording of the logline could be better, for example:
After witnessing her mother's rape/murder an agoraphobic girl must [do something interesting] in order to achieve [a compelling goal].
The mental illness is only a problem if it holding a person back from other things. ?What is the impact on her life?
A stranger helps?an orphaned girl?fighting the ?hallucinations and anxiety caused by the rape and murder of her mother before she's permanently institutionalized.
(I tried to add a ?"ticking clock")