Rework: When a witness in custody and two cops are killed, the Homicide Detective must solve a piracy case to catch the killer and the mastermind. Thriller? Crime? Drama? Sci-Fi? Not sure…

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Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

This is mostly unclear. What is the relation between a piracy case and the triple murder? There is no logic connecting these elements directly. Furthermore, if he or she is a detective he or she are just doing their job, what makes it unique or interesting? Where is the hook?

Foxtrot25 · Mentor · 8,420 pts

We can fundamentally polish this...

After two cops and their witness are assassinated, a detective's investigation leads him into an undercover ring of piracy controlled by a ruthless murderer.

But we still need to spice up the detective, this piracy operation and even the murderer somehow, or else it risks sounding ordinary.