Rewrite: When a muslim woman- betrothed as a child, follows her dream to choose her husband by herself, she must face terrorisation from her betrothed who feels dishonored.

by Benneth · Logliner · 320 pts 366 views

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Foxtrot25 · Mentor · 8,420 pts

Benneth,

Sorry to say that I like the last version better.

1yzzy75 · Penpusher · 155 pts

Terrorization? Is that really a word? Also, the dash is misplaced, it should be a comma. I love this idea, though. Keep going with it!