The misguided desire of a narcissistic military scientist brings about the creation of a narcotic with the premise of world peace, however his pursuit of global mind control is in danger when a human test subject re-awakens from the zombie like state.

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lewisricekrispy · Wordsmith · 795 pts

The villains goal and personality traits make him unaware of how bad or evil he is. He believes everything he is doing is for the good of man. His point of view is that he is the protagonist, and anyone who doesn't go along with him is a kind of antagonist (the main one being the guy who comes out of the control he's been under).
Most of the story will be told through the good guys account of events, bar a few flash back scenes. However the story will be split amoungst the two, making them both the heroes (in a sense) of their tales.

I'm now going to try and add the heroes goals in as advised. Thanks for all advice and comments so far.

Richiev · Legend · 58,825 pts

The lead character is the one taking action. In this case it seems to be the misguided scientist. In fact after reading your logline I would never have guessed that the scientist wasn't the lead character.

lewisricekrispy · Wordsmith · 795 pts

Thanks for the input. A problem i'm facing is that the heroes goal could be seen as rather dull. His goal to begin with is to merly be free from control, later on it is to stop the villain.