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I feel that the elements in this are all exciting, but there are lots of gaps, which can I found a bit overwhelming. Perhaps consider breaking it down a little and spreading those concepts out?
e.g.: A (adjective) (profession) is contacted by his estranged and badly wounded daughter, who claims to have been brainwashed by the CIA; he must now attempt to keep safe from her former employers while rekindling their relationship.
The problem with this logline is the term 'a distant father'
Just because he is a father doesn't mean he can help.
When his daughter is wounded a former marine must...
When his daughter is wounded a computer genius must...
What special skills does the father have? Why is he the one who can take down the program? Why him?
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