When a jaded business woman tries to sell her eye-sore car to an optimistic college student, they find a time capsule of forgotten items from her youth. Bonding over discovered similar interests, they desperately try to grapple the generational gap, nostalgia and envy of each other’s lives. Ultimately, the woman is forced to either go through with the sale and let go of the past, or hold onto the car which encapsulates it.

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Focus on the emotional journey and drop the detail.

Why is she triggered by discovering the items. Perhaps look at that.

You can see all the emotions in your mind put them on the page. (Not your story, just an example).

Disillusioned with life, a woman while getting her car ready to sell finds items that triggers her start a journey to rediscover herself and question her own life choices.

Agreed with yqwert, the stakes and drama don't seem to hold up.

Is the dramatic question whether the woman will sell the car or not?

If so I suggest that the story be about the older woman, and her emotional entanglement with the car needs to be greater. What if the car belonged to her son or husband who died in a car crash?

Is this for a short or a feature length film?

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