When a spaceship transporting colonists on a 90 year journey to a distant planet malfunctions causing a passenger to awaken from hibernation early, he must find a way to resume hibernation or die of old age.

by dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts 961 views

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Passengers (2016)

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CraigDGriffiths · Legend · 12,600 pts ★ Accepted

An interplanetary colonist wakes up 90 years early he awakens a woman rather than die alone which begins a rocky relationship built on a lie.

A bit wordy. Could be condensed with a rewrite.

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CraigDGriffiths:

I've? flipped on my earlier position and now agree with you.? Because the story hook is embedded in the "B" story -- not the "A" story.? ? And in my book, the hook is the ace high trump card.? Sometimes playing that card requires transgressing a conventional logline rule.? I think this is one such instance.? So here's my revised take:

Either:
When a spacecraft taking colonists to a distant planet malfunctions waking up a man 90 years early, he awakens a woman to relieve his loneliness.
(25 words)

Or:
When a spacecraft taking colonists to a distant planet malfunctions waking up a man 90 years early, he awakens a woman to relieve his loneliness, blames it on the malfunction, and begins to court her affection.
(32 words)

This story line renders the guy as an unsympathetic character.? Which I guess explains why it took 10 years for the script to launch as a film.? And why it failed to launch at the box office.

But, hey, at leasat the check for the screenwriter cleared the bank.

dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts

CraigDGriffiths:

I've? flipped on my earlier position and now agree with you.? Because the story hook is embedded in the "B" story -- not the "A" story.? ? And in my book, the hook is the ace high trump card.? Sometimes playing that card requires transgressing a conventional logline rule.? I think this is one such instance.? So here's my revised take:

Either:
When a spacecraft taking colonists to a distant planet malfunctions waking up a man 90 years early, he awakens a woman to relieve his loneliness.
(25 words)

Or:
When a spacecraft taking colonists to a distant planet malfunctions waking up a man 90 years early, he awakens a woman to relieve his loneliness, blames it on the malfunction, and begins to court her affection.
(32 words)

This story line renders the guy as an unsympathetic character.? Which I guess explains why it took 10 years for the script to launch as a film.? And why it failed to launch at the box office.

But, hey, at leasat the check for the screenwriter cleared the bank.

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