When a superhero is infected with his engineered plague, her ex-boyfriend escapes from prison to steal from a military lab and create a cure before the woman he loves dies in three days.

There are too many moving parts to this one machine.

The complexity of the concept is being reflected in the logline, as most of the people on this thread found it confusing.?The fact that he invented?the plague in the first place, as a means of making it more personal, is redundant seeing as she is his ex and the woman he still loves. Him producing a plague is a complication the story could do without, what if he is a genius that was wrongly put in jail and also the only one who can save the woman he loves? This would simplify the concept and add credibility to his motivations.

In essence the big problem is the question of which?story is going to be the focus of the script.??I think DPG's suggestion is the best one, consider separating the back story from the main plot and engineer either the back story or the main plot to work on their own.

>>but if the premise raises those questions, wouldn't that be what makes you want to watch it in the first place?

It makes me wonder how much exposition in the form of dialogue and/or flashbacks it's going to take to fill in the backstory to explain how/why he engineered a plague germ. And how/why she's infected. (but not normals?) ?And ended up in jail. Oh, and he's her ex.

?I get the sense there are really two stories, maybe even 2 films: ?1] how he engineered the plague, ended up in jail all the while -- the "B" story -- having a relationship w/ the superhero that failed. 2] How he redeemed himself from the mistakes he made, the problems he created in 1].

Right now, I'm thinking the back story is a stronger candidate for a movie.

>>but if the premise raises those questions, wouldn't that be what makes you want to watch it in the first place?

It makes me wonder how much exposition in the form of dialogue and/or flashbacks it's going to take to fill in the backstory to explain how/why he engineered a plague germ. And how/why she's infected. (but not normals?) ?And ended up in jail. Oh, and he's her ex.

?I get the sense there are really two stories, maybe even 2 films: ?1] how he engineered the plague, ended up in jail all the while -- the "B" story -- having a relationship w/ the superhero that failed. 2] How he redeemed himself from the mistakes he made, the problems he created in 1].

Right now, I'm thinking the back story is a stronger candidate for a movie.