After saving an mistreated puppy, a young doctor sets out forming new friendships, helping those in need.

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6 reviews

dng123 · Penpusher · 65 pts

I've got the setup: "When a young doctor finds a mistreated puppy" however, everything else is fluff that doesn't mean anything.

Who's lives do they save, or what kind anyway, and why should I be interested?

What do you actually mean by "forming friendships and living life to the fullest?"

It's a good setup. There are endless possibilities and directions you could take this story, but I would start with that setup, and then consider the story (conflict) you want to tell is.

Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

What Richiev wrote.

What is it the doctor wants specifically, why, and what's stopping him or her from getting it?

Dkpough1 · Mentor · 7,690 pts

A script-and a logline- should be about what the character is doing NOW. What is the conflict, what is the specific goal? Is there a specific patient he wishes to save?

Foxtrot25 · Mentor · 8,420 pts

After saving an abused puppy, a young doctor sets out to help the others in need.

Richiev · Singularity · 58,825 pts

Story is conflict.

Is there a main conflict in your story that you could present in your logline?

StephanieArapian · Penpusher · 35 pts

Mostly, I'm left with questions - can you give us a taste of those adventures? Like one or two highlights? Is there a reason the doctor connects with the puppy and adopts him?