When an adrift Māori minor is stuck in state care, he must befriend a benevolent pedophile to escape the unjust social welfare system of the ’60s.

Great logline and for Australian /NZ, Maori is fine. How young is the boy? and yes trapped is definitely better.

Just one tiny thing that makes me wonder - when he enlists the help of the pedophile, it implies to me that he exchanges favours - if that is the case, fine as he exchanges one thing for another and does create great conflict but I worry about how that 'help' comes. Maybe if we knew about the pedophile - is he conflicted? Sinister? Only likes them younger? And how do they come into play together - is he a foster carer?

Definitely intriguing and I want to hear more!!!

I pondered whether to include any adjective at all? to describe the boy.? ?I am not knowledgeable of the particulars, but I am generally aware of? the plight of the indigenous population in New Zealand.? Because it is similar to the plight of the Native American population in my country, the United States, of which I am all too aware.

The way I figure it, by merely describing the young boy as indigenous --particularly at that point in the 20th Century ---? is to say he's f**ked from Day 1.

I was particularly intrigued by the risky relationship with a pedophile he must engage in out of desperation. That, for me, was the story hook.

This is a movie I would like to see.? Very best wishes your writing.

I pondered whether to include any adjective at all? to describe the boy.? ?I am not knowledgeable of the particulars, but I am generally aware of? the plight of the indigenous population in New Zealand.? Because it is similar to the plight of the Native American population in my country, the United States, of which I am all too aware.

The way I figure it, by merely describing the young boy as indigenous --particularly at that point in the 20th Century ---? is to say he's f**ked from Day 1.

I was particularly intrigued by the risky relationship with a pedophile he must engage in out of desperation. That, for me, was the story hook.

This is a movie I would like to see.? Very best wishes your writing.