When an out of work teacher is given a deadline by a loan shark, he contracts a hit-man on himself so his family can collect on his life insurance. However after he befriends the hit-man they decide to fake his death instead.

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Contract – a feature film

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Fma · Samurai · 1,460 pts

An out of work teacher?who must? repay a?sadistic loan shark in 24 hours or get his ears chopped off??befriends a hit-man who agrees to help him fake his death, but the?loan shark isn't quite convinced he's dead?and?his new identity?in a wig and heels is?almost too much to bear

Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

>> After a jealous board member frames a high-flying CEO for embezzlement she hires a hit man to fake her own death to avoid jail but they end up working together to bring the jealous board member to justice.

I think this revised logline works rather well as a corporate sabotage story, but since the board member is mentioned first (the subject), it's unclear that the CEO is the one who hires the hitman and that she's the protag. Suggest reversing the order of the subjects in the opening phrase:

After a high-flying CEO is framed for embezzlement by a jealous board member, she hires a hitman to fake her own death to avoid jail and then joins forces with him to expose the board member's nefarious scheme.

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