When Superpowered Nelly discovers that her mother is not really death, but a lie implanted in her head, she goes on a crazy journey to discover the truth, but her evil father has other plans for her.

Hi Birdman, I agree with the others:

• Superpowered - are we in a superpower world or is this power a result of some part of the story?
• A crazy journey - this could mean anything. ?What is she searching for? ?Her mother? ?The truth about what specifically?
• Her evil father feels quite comic book - that may be the feel you're going for, but the father needs more motivation than just being evil - he's the hero in his own story.

As Nir Shelter said.

And the villain always "has other plans".? No headline news there.? A villain wouldn't be a villain if he didn't have "other plans".

The question the logline needs to answer is:? what, specifically, are those "other plans"? What is the speciifc threat, or obstacle the father poses?

As Nir Shelter said.

And the villain always "has other plans".? No headline news there.? A villain wouldn't be a villain if he didn't have "other plans".

The question the logline needs to answer is:? what, specifically, are those "other plans"? What is the speciifc threat, or obstacle the father poses?