When the daughter of a corrupt Mexican police chef of Iguala is kidnapped, he goes om a murderous rampage while unwillingly helped by a masked female vigilante who brutally revenges the endless killings of Mexican favela girls.
Categories: Drama
6 reviews
There are a few grammar and spelling errors that throw off the reader best to double check these for the next draft.
It seems obvious to me that the police chief can't be the protagonist as he is a despicable character (according to your second post) and as such the audience will not develop empathy with him.
The daughter sounds like the best candidate for being the protagonist so best to re-draft the logline from her point of view. The masked vigilante seems redundant as she is unrelated to the plot at hand (from the daughter's perspective) if the plot is that the daughter wants to bring her father to justice that is.
The inciting incident could be the father killing the daughter's best friend and that is what forces her into action then the goal will be her getting her father arrested.
Hope this helps.
Tanks FFF, maybe she has to kill her father. Good idea. Will take a lot of wok to clean up this logline.
I think the story could work if a father and his masked daughter fights against the bad cops and the criminals, until he understand the truth and he must be killed by his daughter - VERY POWERFUL, action and tragedy - write it!