While investigating a missing persons case, tabloid journalist David Cross discovers a secret military base guarding a mysterious mansion in the woods of a rural Indiana town.

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hi mmckean,

I feel like in the above logline you have described the inciting incident rather than the main action of the story.

I'm not clear whether the missing persons investigation will be the focus of your screenplay or whether the uncovered mystery to do with mansion will be.

Intriguing premise!