1. Posted: February 22, 2016In:

    When an insecure screenwriter writing a screenplay about Al Capone is captured by Capone himself, he must escape the gangster’s clutches before he is tortured into writing a screenplay he hates and shot in the head.

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    It's a bit long, just want to see if I'm getting the elements right. I see this as a Coen brothers style black comedy.

    It’s a bit long, just want to see if I’m getting the elements right. I see this as a Coen brothers style black comedy.

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  2. Posted: October 11, 2015In:

    When a naive network engineer is suddenly disconnected from global mind-meld he must find a way to reconnect before government operatives hunt him down or sickness due to disconnection kills him.

    andrewclau Logliner

    Thanks for the feedback guys, the logline structure works but the elements are way too vague. Will try again at another date. Cheers.

    Thanks for the feedback guys, the logline structure works but the elements are way too vague. Will try again at another date. Cheers.

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  3. Posted: October 11, 2015In:

    When a womanizing porn-star’s penis falls off due to a spell cast on him by his possessive porn-star wife he must undo the spell before the biggest shoot of his career and save his relationship.

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    Thank you for the feedback guys, gives me a lot to think about. In terms of outer?journeys?is undoing the spell not strong enough an outer goal? This?is too vague?

    Thank you for the feedback guys, gives me a lot to think about. In terms of outer?journeys?is undoing the spell not strong enough an outer goal? This?is too vague?

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