1. Posted: March 18, 2016In:

    When an intergalactic refugee crash-lands at his farm, a timid teenager must find the courage to protect the exile and himself from malicious space hunters.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    This idea is for a short film, I appreciate the feedback. I will go over my notes and try for a better logline, cheers.

    This idea is for a short film, I appreciate the feedback. I will go over my notes and try for a better logline, cheers.

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  2. Posted: December 14, 2015In:

    After the Grim Reaper has guided countless people to the Afterlife, a suitable replacement must don the cowl, so Death can finally rest in peace.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Thank you all for the helpful feedback. I noticed no I.I after I posted the Logline. The Protagonist is = Death Antagonist is = Time Here is an update "After a mass shooting the Grim Reaper decides to hang up the cowl, he must convince an ill man to be his replacement so Death can find peace" StillRead more

    Thank you all for the helpful feedback.
    I noticed no I.I after I posted the Logline.

    The Protagonist is = Death
    Antagonist is = Time

    Here is an update
    “After a mass shooting the Grim Reaper decides to hang up the cowl, he must convince an ill man to be his replacement so Death can find peace”

    Still needs work, but thank-you for pointing me in the right direction

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  3. Posted: November 21, 2012In:

    When a Fire-Demon from his parents past kidnaps his fianc?, a timid hydrologist must locate a mythical artefact and uncover its power before the Devil kills his lover and unborn child.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Hi Alice My original logline had the protagonist as a janitor who had a fear of water, his fear in turns to be his greatest weapon at the end of his story. But being a Janitor and phobia of water didn't work out great as Janitor's use water in every day use. I like the idea of "building the device"Read more

    Hi Alice
    My original logline had the protagonist as a janitor who had a fear of water, his fear in turns to be his greatest weapon at the end of his story. But being a Janitor and phobia of water didn’t work out great as Janitor’s use water in every day use.

    I like the idea of “building the device” But I’m not sure that’s the path I want this story to take.
    Long story short, there is a hidden power inside the artifact, a power that his mother once possessed.

    I think I’ll work with the logline a bit more and go along with the phobia of water, his occupation will obviously change.

    Thanks for the feedback.

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