1. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    A grieving vigilante puts his family in danger when he goes on a killing rampage to avenge his murdered son…

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    I like it. With loglines I'm not sure you want to end it with "..." Makes it feel like it is missing something, needs something etc.

    I like it.
    With loglines I’m not sure you want to end it with “…” Makes it feel like it is missing something, needs something etc.

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  2. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    When a timid janitor's fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate the mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his partner before the devil's army scorches the earth.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Thanks, fella.

    Thanks, fella.

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  3. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    When a timid janitor's fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate the mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his partner before the devil's army scorches the earth.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Revised When a timid janitor?s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his lover before the devil?s army scorches the earth

    Revised

    When a timid janitor?s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his lover before the devil?s army scorches the earth

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