1. Posted: August 20, 2012In:

    A family of losers, while trying to gain foothold in life, are forced into action to save their kidnapped son

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Hi Murugan Nice idea. Great i.i (Kidnapped son) but who kidnapped him? Who's the Antagonist? instead of focusing on a group (family) maybe just one character (father, son, sister, Mother etc) How would you describe that person, character-wise? Loser, unlucky, lonely, blind? Something that they needRead more

    Hi Murugan

    Nice idea. Great i.i (Kidnapped son) but who kidnapped him? Who’s the Antagonist?
    instead of focusing on a group (family) maybe just one character (father, son, sister, Mother etc)
    How would you describe that person, character-wise? Loser, unlucky, lonely, blind? Something that they need to over come before the end of the journey.

    Goal –
    Stakes –
    Inner Conflict –
    Outer Conflict –
    Hook –
    Genre –

    Fill out these elements and the logline becomes more clear. try rearranging or placing new words, more powerful, descriptive words. Shorten the logline to under 30 words, 25 seems to be the best.

    I suggest looking at the “classics” page, here you can see how a logline is written for movies already made.

    “A now broken doctor is sentenced to death for his wifes murder, forced to reassess his morals, he escapes now as the clock ticks he must survive to prove his innocence” – The fugitive

    Best of luck

    Andrew

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  2. Posted: August 2, 2012In:

    A debilitated wildlife ranger discovers mutilated human remains, survives a Lycanthrope attack. He struggles to find safety from a group of sadistic werewolf hunters hot on his tail

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    sorry, bad typo "no known cure" so the cure is the goal. "preserving wildlife" I was showing what the character was doing before the i.i, but since the title is in the name, I'm better off without it i think. "A lone tracker survives a werewolf attack. No known cure and a new moon rising, his answerRead more

    sorry, bad typo “no known cure” so the cure is the goal.
    “preserving wildlife” I was showing what the character was doing before the i.i, but since the title is in the name, I’m better off without it i think.

    “A lone tracker survives a werewolf attack. No known cure and a new moon rising, his answers lie with the sadistic poachers pursuing him”

    Thanks for the help, Joy. 🙂

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  3. Posted: August 2, 2012In:

    A debilitated wildlife ranger discovers mutilated human remains, survives a Lycanthrope attack. He struggles to find safety from a group of sadistic werewolf hunters hot on his tail

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Hi Chris Cheers for the feedback. Any advice is good advice. The remains were just someone that was attacked, so little importance. here is the updated version A lone tracker preserving wildlife survives a werewolf attack. No cure and a new moon rising. His answers lie with the sadistic poachers purRead more

    Hi Chris
    Cheers for the feedback. Any advice is good advice.

    The remains were just someone that was attacked, so little importance.

    here is the updated version

    A lone tracker preserving wildlife survives a werewolf attack. No cure and a new moon rising. His answers lie with the sadistic poachers pursuing him? (25 words)

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