1. Posted: July 18, 2015

    In an apocalyptic winter filled with zombies, Juliet is on a rampage to kill Romeo at all costs.

    blossomingscripts Penpusher

    First off....I think it would be beneficial for your logline to hint at the reasoning behind Juliet wanting to kill Romeo. How do zombies factor into the story? Is Romeo one? Romeo and Juliet are lovers in almost every iteration of the tale, so you gotta explain why one is on a rampage to kill the oRead more

    First off….I think it would be beneficial for your logline to hint at the reasoning behind Juliet wanting to kill Romeo. How do zombies factor into the story? Is Romeo one? Romeo and Juliet are lovers in almost every iteration of the tale, so you gotta explain why one is on a rampage to kill the other.

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  2. Posted: July 15, 2015In:

    A young woman from a conservative family background drops out of Harvard University and rises to fame as a performer in the porn industry.

    blossomingscripts Penpusher

    Thanks. All valid thoughts. What about: "A bashful young woman from a conservative family background drops out of Harvard University and rises to fame as a performer in the porn industry."

    Thanks. All valid thoughts. What about: “A bashful young woman from a conservative family background drops out of Harvard University and rises to fame as a performer in the porn industry.”

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  3. Posted: July 13, 2015In:

    A recently divorced doctor and an entrepreneur facing an existential crisis, form an unlikely partnership and take the help of earthly wizards to overcome the trials of life.

    blossomingscripts Penpusher

    I agree with the other comment. Your logline doesn't hint at any plot, and is overall very vague. Who are these wizards? What does this unlikely partnership result in? Some type of road trip or something? What happens in this film?

    I agree with the other comment. Your logline doesn’t hint at any plot, and is overall very vague. Who are these wizards? What does this unlikely partnership result in? Some type of road trip or something? What happens in this film?

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