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A young street level dealer must navigate the mine field of gang culture to get out before the gang implodes in a bloody internal war.
Why must he navigate the mine field of gang culture? Does he have a larger purpose then escape?
Why must he navigate the mine field of gang culture? Does he have a larger purpose then escape?
See lessWhen her only daughter intends to get married within a month, 50 yrs old widow Neela, who has deep fear of loneliness, must become aware of this fear by stop denying it and then try to face and overcome this fear by accepting the truth that we are all alone so that she can give consent to her daughter's marriage.
The emotionally driven component of this log line needs to be even clearer. I haven't read previous comments so If I am repeating anything, my apologies. Even though the emotional path for your lead is straight and clear to you, present it as cleanly as you can while positioning the conflict in theRead more
The emotionally driven component of this log line needs to be even clearer. I haven’t read previous comments so If I am repeating anything, my apologies. Even though the emotional path for your lead is straight and clear to you, present it as cleanly as you can while positioning the conflict in the middle.
So this means – Neela’s emotional path part one + conflict + Neela’s ultimate goal and said clearer with fewer words. Dpg is terrific when advising about being concise and brief.
Cheers!
See lessA Nanny is mysteriously directed to the wrong house and is demanded to kill captive children for a soul hungry Entity whose time is running out to earn immortality; she must choose to save the children and escape or be tortured, forever captive with them.
I debated about what one word description to place before the word (nanny), Bipolar might be better. So can "power hungry" because she manipulates children for a living and this practice of hers is hidden. However "power hungry" is more associated to politicians. Got it. However, the story is designRead more
I debated about what one word description to place before the word (nanny), Bipolar might be better. So can “power hungry” because she manipulates children for a living and this practice of hers is hidden. However “power hungry” is more associated to politicians. Got it. However, the story is designed to tear her defences down and expose what she really wants for herself and to get it. I have to re-think about the adjective before the word (nanny). I might change it. This is the story’s largest hook. It has to be accurate. I’m whittling this down. I’ll make this work. Thank you dpg. Your blunt observation is helping in a big way.
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