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A Nanny is mysteriously directed to the wrong house and is demanded to kill captive children for a soul hungry Entity whose time is running out to earn immortality; she must choose to save the children and escape or be tortured, forever captive with them.
Alrighty, I'm not going to let a winded 70 word log line ruin my chances to get this right, LOL. Here I go again. I'm such a noob. This time, I'm cutting out the bulk of the story and getting to it's essence. I read somewhere a log line is not a story review, it's representative of the story's stronRead more
Alrighty, I’m not going to let a winded 70 word log line ruin my chances to get this right, LOL. Here I go again. I’m such a noob. This time, I’m cutting out the bulk of the story and getting to it’s essence. I read somewhere a log line is not a story review, it’s representative of the story’s strongest hook. So here’s my honest-to good revised hook (a.k.a. – log line) Thank you to all who have commented! I deeply appreciate your input!
See lessAfter a night of self destructive drinking a boy (Chris) discovers that his girlfriend (Anna) possesses the ability to remain immortal as long as she does not fall in love. As Chris' family life decays, he runs away from home with Anna to show her a life bereft of love is not one lived.
I'm clear about what the characters are trying to do. However I'm not clear on the motivations or the point of contention. There is a log line formula that I just used (dug it out after forgetting about it): Here it is: A (protagonist) has (a descriptive problem) and must (achieve goal) to solve (prRead more
I’m clear about what the characters are trying to do. However I’m not clear on the motivations or the point of contention.
There is a log line formula that I just used (dug it out after forgetting about it):
Here it is:
A (protagonist) has (a descriptive problem) and must (achieve goal) to solve (problem).
Where the words are parenthetical, fill in with your character and plot points.
Maybe that helps.
See lessA Nanny is mysteriously directed to the wrong house and is demanded to kill captive children for a soul hungry Entity whose time is running out to earn immortality; she must choose to save the children and escape or be tortured, forever captive with them.
My bad. I went back to a basic log line structure that I forgot to use. The most recent update is the (hopeful) improvement. Thank you to all for your input!
My bad. I went back to a basic log line structure that I forgot to use. The most recent update is the (hopeful) improvement. Thank you to all for your input!
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