1. Posted: November 16, 2013In:

    When a highly-successful psychologist saves a man on the street from suicide, she decides she isn't helping enough people who really need it, and starts a "mobile therapist" ride company, counseling strangers from pick-up to destination; until one-day she accepts a fare across country from a man with real demons to confront.

    CamillaBeskow

    I like your story! The logline feels a little wordy though. I would personally try to whittle it down a little. Maybe something along the lines of; "A successful psychologist starts a "mobile therapist"-company, counseling people from pick up to destination, but realizes she may be in over her headRead more

    I like your story! The logline feels a little wordy though. I would personally try to whittle it down a little. Maybe something along the lines of;

    “A successful psychologist starts a “mobile therapist”-company, counseling people from pick up to destination, but realizes she may be in over her head when she finds herself traveling across country alongside a man facing real demons.”

    Again, really like the story. I’d watch the film.

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  2. Posted: November 16, 2013In:

    A young scubadiver stumbles onto an ancient alien device that imbues him with superhuman abilities. This enables him to establish world peace and spark mankind into becoming a space faring civilization.

    CamillaBeskow

    I feel like this logline lacks conflict. If finding these abilities simply enables him to establish world peace, then what's the problem? What obsticles will he be forced to overcome?

    I feel like this logline lacks conflict. If finding these abilities simply enables him to establish world peace, then what’s the problem? What obsticles will he be forced to overcome?

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