1. Posted: September 7, 2012In:

    ?When a dubious pet psychiatrist loses his wife to his richest client, can a high school crush and obsessed cat owner rescue his practice and self-worth??

    ChasFisher

    Sounds like a great hook here, but this logline gives no hint of the "fuel" of the film. I.e. what is the primary conflict that will drive the second act?

    Sounds like a great hook here, but this logline gives no hint of the “fuel” of the film. I.e. what is the primary conflict that will drive the second act?

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  2. Posted: September 7, 2012In:

    Years after his son?s murder, a bitter gangster-vigilante trains a new recruit, but the young undercover commando is there to take the gang boss down?

    ChasFisher

    I am ignoring the explanation of the story and just going by the logline (as this is the purpose). This logline is way too busy and confusing. For example, because of the word "but" it feels like the new recruit and young undercover commando are different people. Are they? And is the gangster-vigilaRead more

    I am ignoring the explanation of the story and just going by the logline (as this is the purpose). This logline is way too busy and confusing. For example, because of the word “but” it feels like the new recruit and young undercover commando are different people. Are they? And is the gangster-vigilante the same person as the gang boss? Or not?

    Plus, it sounds very much like a The Departed rip off, just on the basis of the logline. What is unique about your script?

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