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  1. Posted: November 14, 2012In: Public

    When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

    Darrin Nightingale
    Added an answer on November 16, 2012 at 2:05 am

    The story deals specifically with illicit drugs. The insects are genetically engineered to eat drugs. A different insect for each drug. The pathology of the insects involve the drug users in their reproductive cycle. Basically the insects are released. Feed on the drugs. Then attack a user of that dRead more

    The story deals specifically with illicit drugs. The insects are genetically engineered to eat drugs. A different insect for each drug. The pathology of the insects involve the drug users in their reproductive cycle. Basically the insects are released. Feed on the drugs. Then attack a user of that drug. The insects larva then use the host as food. Literally eating the user from the inside out. Killing the host when they mature and escape the body. The insects are manifestation of prohibition taken to its merciless unrelenting conclusion.

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  2. Posted: November 14, 2012In: Public

    When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

    Darrin Nightingale
    Added an answer on November 15, 2012 at 10:06 pm

    I agree with everything you said but didn't really see it so clearly until you pointed it out. The phrases "risks everything" and "tyrannical forces of prohibition" are, as you said, generic and unnecessary. Taking on board your advise to not include the insect and prompted by patrockd's reply I offRead more

    I agree with everything you said but didn’t really see it so clearly until you pointed it out. The phrases “risks everything” and “tyrannical forces of prohibition” are, as you said, generic and unnecessary. Taking on board your advise to not include the insect and prompted by patrockd’s reply I offer this revision.

    When the government start to kill the junkie population, a self-righteous policeman fights to save his drug using sister.

    How does that sound? This has been really interesting for me. Thanks for taking the time to reply.

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  3. Posted: November 14, 2012In: Public

    When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

    Darrin Nightingale
    Added an answer on November 15, 2012 at 9:51 pm

    I thought I was being concise until I read your version. I like the sparseness. Part of me has been afraid to be that essential. But, as your version eloquently illustrates, sparseness is the name of the game with log lines. There is one thing I would change. I prefer the phrase "drug using sister"Read more

    I thought I was being concise until I read your version. I like the sparseness. Part of me has been afraid to be that essential. But, as your version eloquently illustrates, sparseness is the name of the game with log lines. There is one thing I would change. I prefer the phrase “drug using sister” instead of “addict sister”. How does this sound?

    When the government release swarms of junkie killing insects a self-righteous policeman struggles to save his drug using sister.

    I know it’s pedantic but the distinction that not all drug users are addicts is really important to the story. I might be wrong. You tell me. Thanks for taking the time to reply.

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