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That psychedelic drug would be developed by the person who cooked it getting to the highest purity range In the planet,in/on each individual will be processed differently and this is what alarms the person because it’d mean the reality on this world that the consumer is expiriencing COULD change.An entity would change it,anentity that uses the connection that occurs when the receptors in the brain receive the substance molecule(which can be related to all psychedelic drugs known to mankind including “the god’s molecule”) as it’s path to communicate with the person(man or woman). thriller/enhancer/ introspective/suspense (don’t think about stealing it or filtering it…this entity will know…I AM THE OWNER).
Yunsa: This doesn't seem to be a synopsis, and it definitely isn't a logline. In 109 words the post doesn't establish a protagonist, an antagonist, or any sort of plot. This post uses story-specific elements that make no sense out of context and I can't make much sense out of it. I thought this concRead more
Yunsa:
This doesn’t seem to be a synopsis, and it definitely isn’t a logline. In 109 words the post doesn’t establish a protagonist, an antagonist, or any sort of plot. This post uses story-specific elements that make no sense out of context and I can’t make much sense out of it.
I thought this concept was familiar and it turns out you’ve posted this concept before. ?The first attempt was better than this, but still needed a polish. There are five different reviews on that post and you don’t seem to have studied any of the feedback given to you in an attempt to make a better logline. So, please review the Formula tab at the top of the page, read through the feedback you’ve already received, and look through other people’s loglines and the feedback they’ve received and try to gain a better understanding of forming a logline. An even better way to learn to understand a logline is to post reviews on other people’s, try to decide and understand what works and doesn’t in their loglines.
See lessIn other words, please try your best to create a logline for your concept that is as close to the standard format so the other members can be as efficient and effective as possible in helping you revise it. If nothing else just describe the protagonist and the objective goal they pursue.
On a morning jog a woman stumbles upon a dead body, afterward she is visited by spirits prompting her to dig into the past to uncover the sins of the town saints.
This logline lacks conflict. It also needs a specific objective goal. As a result of these spirits visiting her, what is her specific goal? Who's standing in her way? Why does she care?
This logline lacks conflict. It also needs a specific objective goal. As a result of these spirits visiting her, what is her specific goal? Who’s standing in her way? Why does she care?
See lessSet in a near future where teacher’s carry firearms, a divorced high school educator shoots her least favorite student when he breaks her young daughter’s heart. (Negligent Discharge)
This logline attempt only describes background and ends with the inciting incident. A logline should describe the plot, the present, the conflict of the story, and find a way to include any necessary background information without making it too long. For general information on making a logline, studRead more
This logline attempt only describes background and ends with the inciting incident. A logline should describe the plot, the present, the conflict of the story, and find a way to include any necessary background information without making it too long. For general information on making a logline, study the Formula tab at the top of the page. Also, try reviewing other people’s loglines and reading the feedback other reviewers give on the loglines on the site.?
See lessAn inciting incident should be something outside of the protagonist’s control, something which upsets their life and forces them to pursue a goal. But your protagonist’s conflict stems from a decision she makes on her own. Why? What happens before that? As Richiev asks, when in the story does the shooting happen? What is the conflict of the story? This concept has potential to discuss a politically charged subject, but the logline needs to focus on the main plot of the story.
I hope this helps.