1. Posted: April 9, 2017In:

    MAKING WHOOPI – The unbelievable true and moving triumph of the human spirit story of how Caryn Elaine Johnson’s powerful relationship with her mother helped her survive the welfare system in 1950’s Manhattan, drug addiction, and a self inflicted abortion to reinvent herself into a world- reknowned Academy Award winning actress.

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    >>>Caryn Elaine Johnson?sAka: Whoopi Goldberg. ?So that's the name to use in the logline as well as the title.Good title, but, Ms. Goldberg controls all the rights to her life story, so I don't see the point of taking the time to polish this logline unless you've got a contract to script aRead more

    >>>Caryn Elaine Johnson?s

    Aka: Whoopi Goldberg. ?So that’s the name to use in the logline as well as the title.

    Good title, but, Ms. Goldberg controls all the rights to her life story, so I don’t see the point of taking the time to polish this logline unless you’ve got a contract to script a story on her life.

    Just staying.

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  2. Posted: April 3, 2017In:

    When her male colleagues wager on her best friend’s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance.

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    >>>she seeks to drive him suicidally insane.?Why doesn't she just plot his death?OR: what is the emotional truth in the moment after the rapist beats the rap? ?What is the emotional truth in the heart of the protagonist?What is the emotional truth in the heart of the audience as they witnesRead more

    >>>she seeks to drive him suicidally insane.?

    Why doesn’t she just plot his death?

    OR: what is the emotional truth in the moment after the rapist beats the rap? ?What is the emotional truth in the heart of the protagonist?

    What is the emotional truth in the heart of the audience as they witness such an outrageous injustice?

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  3. Posted: April 5, 2017In:

    When his breakthrough idea got stolen,an aspiring TV writer must fight to keep both his job and sanity

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    >>>discovers that nobody is who they seems to beLoglines are about what the protagonist does, not what he discovers. The sole exception?being ?a discovery in the 1st Act that constitutes the inciting incident. ?As in "When a wife discovers her husband is cheating on him, she...."In this verRead more

    >>>discovers that nobody is who they seems to be

    Loglines are about what the protagonist does, not what he discovers. The sole exception?being ?a discovery in the 1st Act that constitutes the inciting incident. ?As in “When a wife discovers her husband is cheating on him, she….”

    In this version logline, the discovery comes in the 2nd and/or 3rd Acts.

    Also, nobody is who they seem to be in showbiz. ?That’s not a story hook, that’s standard operating procedure. ?Another reason it’s extraneous to a ?logline.

    And legally, it’s not necessarily intellectual theft to run with someone else’s idea. ?A story based upon that idea, a script, an outline or treatment that develops? or clones that idea — yes, you can sue for that. ?But the ?raw , undeveloped idea itself that has no documented development and copyright beyond a logline has little or no legal protection. ?If it can’t pass the threshhold requirements for the Copyright Office of the United States to accept as qualifying for copyright protection, it’s darn well near impossible to sue in U.S. courts.

    Your logline plays on a ?nightmare that every writer?has . ?But it also has to pass the credibility test, what every writer would know — or should know — ?about limits of legal protection for intellectual property.

    Just saying, refine your phrasing?to make it legally credible.

    Finally, it’s all too common for writers sue over the theft of intellectual property. (Every successful movie gets sued for intellectual theft.) ?So your character’s plight is common — not unique. ?What might be unique is what he does about the theft. ?Of which there is no clue in the logline. ?

    IOW: ?what’s the story hook? ?What makes this story different from all the other woeful tales about writers having their ideas stolen?

    fwiw

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