1. Posted: April 18, 2017In:

    A teenage Jewish boy Harles in a Nazi death camp sets out to prove his love to Hitler’s daughter Ida who once pretended to be Jewish.

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    On the matter of logline basics: >>>sets out to prove his loveHow? ?How does that translate into a specific objective goal? ?That objective goal needs to be what the logline is about.On the matter ?of credibility: The premise requires the audience to suspend disbelief on a number of elementRead more

    On the matter of logline basics:
    >>>sets out to prove his love

    How? ?How does that translate into a specific objective goal? ?That objective goal needs to be what the logline is about.

    On the matter ?of credibility:
    The premise requires the audience to suspend disbelief on a number of elements. ?That Hitler had a daughter. ? That she pretended to be Jewish. (Why? What’s her motive?) That she ended up in a concentration camp. (Again, why would she put her life in peril pretending to be Jewish?)

    That is too many elements for me. I, for one, am unable to suspend disbelief. ?Others’ mileage may vary.

    And if I could suspend disbelief, I think that the story told from her pov would be more compelling, more dramatically interesting. ?IOW: she’s a ?more interesting character; she would make a better protagonist.

    On the matter of marketability:
    Fictional stories on the holocaust are a hard sell because the truth is so much stranger so much more compelling . ?Because there are so many true stories ?of heroism, suffering, and sacrifice.

    The last movie that comes to my mind with a fictional take on the Holocaust ?that ?was ?both a critical and commercial success was “Life is Beautiful” (1997) ?And it succeeded because it was framed by a specific dramatic allegorical and controversial conceit — denial, intentionally, artfully deceiving a loved one about the truth. ?The plot is driven by the father having a very specific objective goal and modus operandi: ?to protect his son from the horrors of the Holocaust by pretending they are going on a holiday.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: April 18, 2017In:

    When his wife becomes a Christian, a devout atheist who believes in truth, uses his journalistic skills to prove Jesus was a myth

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    "Devout atheist" strikes me as somewhat of an oxymoron, perhaps an ironic one, as "devout" is usually a tag given to believers, not non-believers. To whom is he trying to prove Jesus was a mythical character? ?If he's already an atheist, then isn't he trying to persuade his wife, to reason her out oRead more

    “Devout atheist” strikes me as somewhat of an oxymoron, perhaps an ironic one, as “devout” is usually a tag given to believers, not non-believers.

    To whom is he trying to prove Jesus was a mythical character? ?If he’s already an atheist, then isn’t he trying to persuade his wife, to reason her out of her new-found faith. So:

    The true story of a journalist who, when his wife becomes a Christian, uses his investigative skills to convince her that Christ is a myth.
    (25 words)

    And, of course, since the movie is targeted to a Christ-believing audience, his character arc is obvious and obligatory, what the genre requires.

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  3. Posted: April 11, 2017In:

    1892 Mycroft Holmes newly appointed to MI5 investigates a plan to undermine England’s position in Afghanistan not knowing the villains are a young Sherlock and Moriarty.

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    >>>to undermine England?s position in AfghanistanLooking backward from the present tense of the perspective and sensibility of modern movie viewers, wouldn't that make S&M heroes, not villains?>>investigates a planOnly investigate?Isn't his objective goal to stop their heroic actiRead more

    >>>to undermine England?s position in Afghanistan

    Looking backward from the present tense of the perspective and sensibility of modern movie viewers, wouldn’t that make S&M heroes, not villains?

    >>investigates a plan

    Only investigate?

    Isn’t his objective goal to stop their heroic action? ?Whatever it is — that needs to be more specific, too. ?Exactly how do they plan to “undermine” the Evil Empire ?in that region? ?And exactly what must Mycroft do about it?

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