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A pert casino waitress accidentally tripled in stature by a scientist achieves her dream of Vegas stardom and falls in love wuth him, but sacrifices her size to save him when he’s kidnapped by a mobster. .,
Well, the comedic potential and logic of the premise aside, the logline gives away the 3rd Ac: ?what she must ultimately do for the man she loves. ? A logline should never show that card, ?should never reveal what happens in the 3rd Act to resolve the dramatic conflict. ?Should never tip its hand abRead more
Well, the comedic potential and logic of the premise aside, the logline gives away the 3rd Ac: ?what she must ultimately do for the man she loves. ? A logline should never show that card, ?should never reveal what happens in the 3rd Act to resolve the dramatic conflict. ?Should never tip its hand about anything in the 3rd Act.
See lessSeven art students, all of different talents, find themselves trapped in a museum where they rewrite love, beauty and their own humanity before the groups survival overshadows their bohemian lives.
In this version the inciting incident is not clear. ?What traps them in the museum for such a duration that their very survival is at risk?I agree with Nir Shelter that most of the time it is better to spotlight one distinctive character in the logline rather crowd the spotlight with multiple characRead more
In this version the inciting incident is not clear. ?What traps them in the museum for such a duration that their very survival is at risk?
I agree with Nir Shelter that most of the time it is better to spotlight one distinctive character in the logline rather crowd the spotlight with multiple characters. ?Even when the conflict is driven by group dynamics, the story benefits by framing it in terms of one “alpha character”, a first among equals.
Since you obviously wish to populate your logline ?with group of 7 character rather than one main character, what is the social dynamic you wish to explore? ?What is your point, the theme you wish to develop, by throwing this disparate collection of people together?
See lessSeven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious art museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in astonishing ways.
Ah yes, "This is the End". ?This story needs a hook, a twist, that both differentiates it from that film -- and ?tops it.
Ah yes, “This is the End”. ?This story needs a hook, a twist, that both differentiates it from that film — and ?tops it.
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