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Seven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious art museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in astonishing ways.
It's an interesting set up for a comedy sketch. ?But I think it's short on some specific elements for a full-fledged movie. Casting the story with an ensembles where there are many characters but no real "main character" might work for the designated genre because comedy depends so much on the interRead more
It’s an interesting set up for a comedy sketch. ?But I think it’s short on some specific elements for a full-fledged movie.
Casting the story with an ensembles where there are many characters but no real “main character” might work for the designated genre because comedy depends so much on the interplay of relationships. ? But, then again, it may not.
How many story threads are there? ?What’s the “A” story line and who gets tagged as the main characters in it? ?What’s the complementary “B” story line?
Other than mere survival, do they have an immediate and urgent objective goal? ?Is there any dramatic problem that demands action? ?Or do they just need to hunker down, hang out and wait until… whatever? ?Is there a ticking clock?
“Find that life continues in ?astonishing ways” is rather vague. ?And further ?loglines are about actions characters must take, not epiphanies they [finally] have.
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torgodog: The logline has certainly morphed ?from the ?original posting, version 1.0. ?Obviously, you want to "chew on the bone" of homelessness. ?Why? ? What is the central issue about homelessness that you want to explore?
torgodog:
The logline has certainly morphed ?from the ?original posting, version 1.0. ?Obviously, you want to “chew on the bone” of homelessness. ?Why? ? What is the central issue about homelessness that you want to explore?
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Essentially it's a story of a treasure hunt in outer space: an odd couple must partner up to find a legendary fortune before some one else does.Unlike the version 1.0, there is now a rival for the loot which should increase dramatic tension and suspension. ?That's an improvement.My problem concernsRead more
Essentially it’s a story of a treasure hunt in outer space: an odd couple must partner up to find a legendary fortune before some one else does.
Unlike the version 1.0, there is now a rival for the loot which should increase dramatic tension and suspension. ?That’s an improvement.
My problem concerns the stakes: ?these days, finding or stealing money or treasure for the sake of the loot is never enough in a movie. ?The principal characters want the money all right– but they also want to use the heist or hunt as a means to accomplish ?something else.
It seems to me that something more than mere greed for gain should be at stake.
Take “Ocean’s Eleven” (version 2.0). ?Danny Ocean hasn’t taken a vow of poverty. ?Nor has the man staking Danny, Ruben Tishkoff. ?Both also want more than just the money. ?Ruben wants revenge on Terry Benedict for muscling Ruben out of his casino and then blowing it up. ?Danny wants to win back his ex, Tess. who is now Benedict’s trophy girlfriend.
So, it seems to me, there needs to be something more at stake than the merely the satisfaction of greed in this story. ?What, I dunno. ?Although the Indiana Jones movies show how treasure hunts can have bigger and more socially redeemable stakes than mere greed.
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