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When an intergalactic refugee crash-lands at his farm, a timid teenager must find the courage to protect the exile and himself from malicious space hunters.
A logline is about a setup?of a dramatic problem that will constitute the main action in the 2nd Act to be resolved successfully or not in the 3rd Act.Taking this logline at face value, it suggests that the main action in the 2nd Act is the timid teenager looking... and looking... and looking...?forRead more
A logline is about a setup?of a dramatic problem that will constitute the main action in the 2nd Act to be resolved successfully or not in the 3rd Act.
Taking this logline at face value, it suggests that the main action in the 2nd Act is the timid teenager looking… and looking… and looking…?for? a subjective factor, his courage.? Which, hopefully he will find? by the 3rd Act, in time to save the exile and himself in the climax.
But it makes for a stronger, more interesting?logline to be explicitly be?about a protagonist’s struggle for an objective goal and only implicitly about whatever?subjective factor he?needs to develop in order to achieve his objective goal.? The missing subjective factor is implied in the character flaw — hence, the character arc — in the teenager being “timid”.? Hence,,? “must find the courage” is extraneous.
It seems to me that this logline might benefit from is a more explicit rendering of HOW he must protect the exile.?? And why — the stakes.? Why must?the teenage?protect him? Maybe the space bounty hunters?after the exile? is?a criminal on the lam.? What injustice or wrong is the exile in need of protection from?
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Putting aside the matter of whether " emotionally and mentally transform themselves" constitutes a valid objective goal, how would they? know from the?mysterious circumstances that is what they should be trying to accomplish? ( Moses did not decipher what he was supposed to do by?merely coming upon?Read more
Putting aside the matter of whether ” emotionally and mentally transform themselves” constitutes a valid objective goal, how would they? know from the?mysterious circumstances that is what they should be trying to accomplish?
( Moses did not decipher what he was supposed to do by?merely coming upon?a?mysterious?burning bush on a rugged mountain.? The bush had to talk.)
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I'm guessing the Golden Gate is a metaphor for the?dramatic problem?of the Thanksgiving dinner, the?wide gap in family relationships (particularly between mother and son) ?that the couple were not able to bridge.? Is that a?correct assumption?
I’m guessing the Golden Gate is a metaphor for the?dramatic problem?of the Thanksgiving dinner, the?wide gap in family relationships (particularly between mother and son) ?that the couple were not able to bridge.? Is that a?correct assumption?
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