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In order to save her abducted daughter, a desperate American expatriate must stop an inexorable Nigerian terrorist from launching a nuclear attack on Nigerian soil.
Agree with Richiev.?? There needs to be a more direct, causal connection between the kidnapping and the bomb threat.? As he does in his suggested logline.? And?I like the plus factor he adds, the ticking clock, only?24 hours to save his daughter.
Agree with Richiev.?? There needs to be a more direct, causal connection between the kidnapping and the bomb threat.? As he does in his suggested logline.? And?I like the plus factor he adds, the ticking clock, only?24 hours to save his daughter.
See lessTrapped in an all-night bank siege, a by-the-book bank teller must outwit both cops and robbers to escape with 100k from the bank?s vault to pay-off his brothers gambling debt.
The?version that spooled through my mind is that he actually pulls off the 100K heist in the confusion of the siege -- and then complications and hilarity ensue. It's definitely a premise that can play out in several different ways.? Best of luck with whichever? one you settle on.
The?version that spooled through my mind is that he actually pulls off the 100K heist in the confusion of the siege — and then complications and hilarity ensue.
It’s definitely a premise that can play out in several different ways.? Best of luck with whichever? one you settle on.
See lessAn aging songwriter used to be wildly successful, but lost his fame when the inspiration for all his songs, his wife, left him. Now, he has been kidnapped by an aspiring singer, who is giving him 3 months to write a great album for the young singer to steal. Having been unable to write anything good for years, the aged star must try to make his ex-wife fall back in love with him, in order to regain his writing ability and save his life.
Tony Edward's version certainly distills the concept to its essence.? However,?it spawned 2 alternate takes?in my mind.? Take #1 focuses on the "A" story:When kidnapped by a pop-star?wanna be, ?a once famous songwriter has 30 days to write a hit album for his kidnapper or die.(24 words)It ups the?drRead more
Tony Edward’s version certainly distills the concept to its essence.? However,?it spawned 2 alternate takes?in my mind.? Take #1 focuses on the “A” story:
When kidnapped by a pop-star?wanna be, ?a once famous songwriter has 30 days to write a hit album for his kidnapper or die.
(24 words)
It ups the?dramatic tension with higher stakes (his life) and a ticking clock (30 days).
But, alas, it fails to include the ” B” story twist that?his only hope of survival.? So take #2:
When kidnapped by a pop-star?wanna be, ?a once famous songwriter has 30 days to write a hit album for his kidnapper or die, a task he can only accomplish by reconnecting with his muse, his ex-wife.
(37 words)
The general rule is that a logline is supposed to be about the “A” story.? Only.?? But there are exceptions to every rule.? And to my way of thinking,? the “B” story is the hook in the concept; it’s ?what makes the “A” story in this logline?compelling — in order to live he must reconnect with his muse.? Love is his only?hope for survival– a bonding agent between audience and the protagonist doesn’t get any stronger than that.
(Although I do wonder?how?can he?win her back when he’s being held hostage.? But then that’s why ?smart phones, email, texting, Instagram and Twitter were invented, to give writers additional options and flexibility for telling their stories.)
Anyway, despite it’s length, despite it being an “A” & “B” story logline, I’m inclined to favor #2.? Best wishes with this story.
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