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(First revision) When townsfolk reject an attention-craving man by magically transforming him into a ghost, he must seek the help of other rejected ghosts in order to find a way to break the curse before it becomes permanent.
Two points:1] If the premise is to work, I suggest the problematic world of the story has to be systemic, universal.? As in "In a dystopic future where individual expresson is forbidden..."2] My reaction (and value system) could be a wacky, weird minority opinion, but I? fail to apprehend how cravinRead more
Two points:
1] If the premise is to work, I suggest the problematic world of the story has to be systemic, universal.? As in “In a dystopic future where individual expresson is forbidden…”
2] My reaction (and value system) could be a wacky, weird minority opinion, but I? fail to apprehend how craving attention, coveting celebrity is a worthwhile objective goal as an end in itself.? Yeah, we all want it — but that doesn’t make it virtuous.
Consider another universal object of desire: $,$$$,$$$.? Except for Buddhist monks and Catholic priests and nuns (a small subset of humanity) most people want a lot more money than they have.? Many want more of it than they need. could possibly spend in their lifetime.
But I can’t think of one movie that celebrates, that portrays as virtuous the pursuit of money for its own sake.? Can you?? In drama the pursuit of filthy lucre for its own sake is corrupting, selling one’s soul to the god of mammon.? It is only virtuous if it becomes a means to a worthwhile end.
Ditto with the pursuit of attention, celebrity for its own sake.
So why will people want to root for the protagonist?? What has he done to deserve attention?? Has he composed glorious music like Mozart?? Painted breathtaking landscapes like Van Gogh? Written novels of profound psychological depth like Melville?
My 2.5 cents worth.
See less?After a botched clinical trial, an out of work sketch artist with synesthesia begins to see through time, which leads to a turbulent partnership with an alcoholic Private Investigator to help solve existing crimes and prevent new ones.? A 1 Hour Drama ? Title ?Savant? or ?Seer? , TBD.
I think a protagonist with synesthesia is a great premise. It has so many visual possibilities.? However, I'm kind of puzzled by the set up.First of all I'm guessing that the purpose of the clinical trial is to treat the synesthesia.? Why?? What motivates it? Synesthesia is a benign condition.? ArtiRead more
I think a protagonist with synesthesia is a great premise. It has so many visual possibilities.? However, I’m kind of puzzled by the set up.
First of all I’m guessing that the purpose of the clinical trial is to treat the synesthesia.? Why?? What motivates it? Synesthesia is a benign condition.? Artists who have had the condition, like Kandinsky and Hockney, may have actually benefited from it.? And I am not aware of any literature? about non-artists suffering psychological torment or their work being hobbled.? What is the logical reason why anyone would try to “cure” him?? Or he would desperately want a cure by subjecting himself to a clinical trial?
To repeat, synesthesia is a great premise for a character attribute. But instead of focusing on and building on that condition, the current logline slaps on a piece of movie magic:? as a result of the botched trial, he acquires short term clairvoyance.? I suggest focusing on and building on the synesthesia.? Specifically, make the synesthesia itself clairvoyant — but he hasn’t realized it.? So the inciting incident might be when it starts to dawn on him that what for years he believed to be outbreaks of random “color coding” in his environment (words or numbers) are actually clairvoyant signals.? He has to decipher those signals case by case.
I suggest this would be a great coming of age story.? The eruptions of clairvoyant “color coding” could begin in adolescence or early adulthood.? IMHO, this strengthens the marketability of the concept because the series now targets the most coveted viewing demographic.
Finally, why not make the protagonist a woman?
fwiw
See lessAn arrogant tattoo artist sets off on a cross country journey to track his missing girlfriend only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge.
emvshah: I suggest one way of connecting his tattoo skill to her is that he developed a relationship with her while giving her a tattoo, the best he's ever done so far. A love story ensues.? And then she mysteriously disappears.? (And the tattoo is unusual, metaphorically significant .) Another quesRead more
emvshah:
I suggest one way of connecting his tattoo skill to her is that he developed a relationship with her while giving her a tattoo, the best he’s ever done so far. A love story ensues.? And then she mysteriously disappears.? (And the tattoo is unusual, metaphorically significant .)
Another question: you tag the? story as a coming of age.? How old is he?? What concerns me that he could certainly have the raw talent for ink, but doesn’t it takes years to develop the skill, acquire the experience, build a reputation?
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