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Crashed on a faraway planet with retrograde amnesia, a young, ingenious but highly schizophrenic astronaut strives to rebuild her spacecraft while endeavoring to outwit a manipulative, shape-shifting alien whose sole impetus is to repopulate by abusing her as a host.
If she has progressive memory loss, but can still fix the spacecraft, does that imply that the memory loss isn't pivotal to her fate?? In a? logline a cognitive defect is only worth mentioning if it puts the attainment of her objective goal in jeopardy.?? So, for the purpose of the plot, why MUST shRead more
If she has progressive memory loss, but can still fix the spacecraft, does that imply that the memory loss isn’t pivotal to her fate?? In a? logline a cognitive defect is only worth mentioning if it puts the attainment of her objective goal in jeopardy.?? So, for the purpose of the plot, why MUST she have progressive memory loss?
It seems you’ve given the character two major tasks: 1] fix the spacecraft; 2] fend off the alien.? Which task is primary, going to get more screen time?
And if she fends off the alien, but can’t fix the spacecraft is she stranded on the planet, doomed to die anyway?
What is the story really and singularly about?? What is the overarching theme that organizes the narrative?
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I, frankly, find the concept confusing.? Who are these extra selves?? Where do they come from?? Previous lives (as in reincarnation)? Or are they earlier versions of the character in the same life..Also, the objective goal is a negative.? He has to stop other selves from doing something.? The must nRead more
I, frankly, find the concept confusing.? Who are these extra selves?? Where do they come from?? Previous lives (as in reincarnation)? Or are they earlier versions of the character in the same life..
Also, the objective goal is a negative.? He has to stop other selves from doing something.? The must not. It’s almost always better to frame an objective goal in positive terms. IOW, the protagonist must proactively do some positive act that is life affirming, life redeeming.
And the protagonist should retain his agency; that is, he should remain the character who is ultimately in charge of his fate.? He is the pivotal character in his own life plot.? As written this logline seems to subcontract his fate out to his other selves.? It’s up to them to save his sorry ass and by merely not doing.? Well, what must he proactively do to save his life that no other version of himself can do?
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As Karel said.? Although in romances, where plots usually pivot on a relationship, a logline focusing on dual protagonists may work.Also I suggest "before it is too late" needs clarification.? Too late for what?? Like, is a female's biological click ticking?? Or...?
As Karel said.? Although in romances, where plots usually pivot on a relationship, a logline focusing on dual protagonists may work.
Also I suggest “before it is too late” needs clarification.? Too late for what?? Like, is a female’s biological click ticking?? Or…?
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