1. Posted: October 31, 2019In:

    A mysterious Dark Planet, a troubled Test Pilot lost at the far side of the Galaxy overcoming the vast obstacles to find his way home to his beloved daughter and wife.

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    The element in the logline that is the strongest candidate for a story hook is the mysterious dark planet.? And it seems to be the obstacle that he must overcome to get back to planet earth.? However, we have no idea what is so mysterious about the planet that it impedes his return;? the mystery isRead more

    The element in the logline that is the strongest candidate for a story hook is the mysterious dark planet.? And it seems to be the obstacle that he must overcome to get back to planet earth.? However, we have no idea what is so mysterious about the planet that it impedes his return;? the mystery is effectively wrapped in more mystery..

    The logline shouldn’t reveal all, of course, but we need some sense of the problem , the dramatic gimmick, that keeps him from making the jump to hyperspace and home.

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  2. Posted: October 30, 2019In: ,

    Inspired by true events, in 1973 a precocious 15-year old boy gets a writing gig from Rolling Stone magazine that sends him on a wild cross-country bus Odyssey with a struggling rock band.

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    Richiev:Your version also comes in? at 33 words and is a perceptive description of the steak, how Cameron Crowe framed the plot. I chose to post a promotional version that sells the sizzle.(I would quibble about the choice of one word; instead of describing the lead singer as reclusive, I would sayRead more

    Richiev:

    Your version also comes in? at 33 words and is a perceptive description of the steak, how Cameron Crowe framed the plot. I chose to post a promotional version that sells the sizzle.

    (I would quibble about the choice of one word; instead of describing the lead singer as reclusive, I would say he’s elusive.? He likes the kid but is wary of interviews because like the other band members, the press is the “enemy”, not to be trusted, not to be confided to.)

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  3. Posted: October 30, 2019In:

    A crazed sidekick searching for a new villain sets her sights on a mild-mannered journalist with a powerful secret.

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    Furtherless:It seems to me that having her uber-boss get caught and imprisoned is a too easy reversal, a? lucky break.? And nothing should be easy for the protagonist.? The antagonist gets all the lucky breaks in drama, the protagonist gets none.? A protagonist must earn success the old fashioned waRead more

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    It seems to me that having her uber-boss get caught and imprisoned is a too easy reversal, a? lucky break.? And nothing should be easy for the protagonist.? The antagonist gets all the lucky breaks in drama, the protagonist gets none.? A protagonist must earn success the old fashioned way, through hard effort, suffering and persistence.

    It might make for an entire movie by itself for the sidekick protege to plot, to connive, to struggle to overthrow her boss.? An origin story, perhaps.

    fwiw

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