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Harlow Reeve, an orphaned teenager becomes aware of her teleportation abilities when she looks into her parents past. Social Media discloses her secret, when she is caught on camera, the world suddenly starts to become aware of her divergence
It's an intriguing premise. And Peter Nguyen's take is an improvement, but I think there remains a fundamental problem: the logline establishes a situation -- but not a plot. A plot is about a character struggling toward a specific objective goal with specific stakes. As currently written, the logliRead more
It’s an intriguing premise. And Peter Nguyen’s take is an improvement, but I think there remains a fundamental problem: the logline establishes a situation — but not a plot. A plot is about a character struggling toward a specific objective goal with specific stakes.
As currently written, the logline places her a reactive role instead of proactive one. The media spotlight is a complication — but a complication to what? That is, what objective goal does it make more difficult for her to achieve? Having discovered her unusual powers, what does she want to do with them? What specifically must she struggle to accomplish?
And what are the stakes? What does she stand to lose if she fails to accomplish her objective goal with her ultra-natural ability? What does she stand to gain if she succeeds?
Give her a specific objective goal and stakes, and I think this has a lot of potential to be a winner.
See lessA struggling businessman has his world upended when a train explosion leaves him wounded in an untamed jungle. He'll have to survive the elements, the wildlife and a forgotten tribe if he ever wants to see his family again.
What continent? South America, Africa?
What continent? South America, Africa?
See lessA struggling businessman has his world upended when a train explosion leaves him wounded in an untamed jungle. He'll have to survive the elements, the wildlife and a forgotten tribe if he ever wants to see his family again.
What continent? South America, Africa?
What continent? South America, Africa?
See less