The basic elements are there for dramatic conflict. But I’m restraining tweaking the logline because I’m not sure whom you conceive to be the protagonist, the playboy or the plodder? Who do you want the audience to root for?

And it seems to me that what’s at stake is not who is better suited but, more the point, who will eventually run the company. So it’s not just a matter of “tensions mounting”, it’s a battle for control of the empire.

And I suggest the spiking the story with urgency: the old man is terminally ill or rapidly becoming incapacitated with Alzheimer’s or some such ticking clock.