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  1. Posted: April 26, 2013In: Public

    "A former modesty blaise hitman, now a seemingly warm hearted grand ma agrees to teach a ice princess how to fight, when one of her gay friends gets smashed by her criminal ex-boyfriend and she now must stop him before the one she loves becomes the victim of his jealousy/ control needs"

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    Added an answer on April 29, 2013 at 3:39 am

    Depends. How old is is the granddaughter as you imagine the story?

    Depends. How old is is the granddaughter as you imagine the story?

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  2. Posted: April 26, 2013In: Public

    "A former modesty blaise hitman, now a seemingly warm hearted grand ma agrees to teach a ice princess how to fight, when one of her gay friends gets smashed by her criminal ex-boyfriend and she now must stop him before the one she loves becomes the victim of his jealousy/ control needs"

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on April 29, 2013 at 2:43 am

    Off the top of my brain pan: When a legendary retired hit woman helps her timid granddaughter fight back against bullies, the teenager turns into a hit woman in her own right. Notes: Modest Blaise: I suggest you don't use her. Not in your logline, no in your story. Because: 1] Don't assume everyoneRead more

    Off the top of my brain pan:

    When a legendary retired hit woman helps her timid granddaughter fight back against bullies, the teenager turns into a hit woman in her own right.

    Notes:

    Modest Blaise: I suggest you don’t use her. Not in your logline, no in your story. Because:

    1] Don’t assume everyone immediately knows who you’re talking about. (I didn’t; I had to google.)

    2 ] IMMEDIATE is a critical operative word in loglines. You’ve only go a few words, a few seconds to make one impression, the right impression. Don’t confuse, don’t puzzle, don’t give the wrong impression.

    3] The character is copyrighted. Which means you have to get clearance to use her in the movie. Which — IF you can get it — is going to cost $$$,$$$ — yeah, six figures at least if it’s a major motion picture. By including that implied cost in your logline, you’re giving producers and directors a reason, an excuse, NOT make a movie from your script. Don’t give them that excuse

    Teenager: just a thought. Think of the prime demographic for a ‘chic action flick’. (See Katniss Everdeen in “The Hunger Games”. Need I say more?) If you movie is a hit then you’ve hit the mother load of movie making: FRANCHISE!

    In loglines, concept is more important than character. I think “a retired hit woman who mentors her granddaughter to become a hit woman” is a cool concept — a potentially viable hook. As in franchise.

    One person’s opinion.

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  3. Posted: April 26, 2013In: Public

    "A former modesty blaise hitman, now a seemingly warm hearted grand ma agrees to teach a ice princess how to fight, when one of her gay friends gets smashed by her criminal ex-boyfriend and she now must stop him before the one she loves becomes the victim of his jealousy/ control needs"

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on April 29, 2013 at 1:29 am

    I'm a sucker for dramatic irony and unintended consequences. And, imho, it might give your logline and story a certain "je ne sais quoi" that makes it stands out. IOW: a hook.

    I’m a sucker for dramatic irony and unintended consequences.

    And, imho, it might give your logline and story a certain “je ne sais quoi” that makes it stands out. IOW: a hook.

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