Gilligaj:

Three points:

1] Is the story world, the setting, a dystopia, a nightmare from which humanity cannot awaken, or…?

2] The setup/premise seems rather complicated.? Good luck cramming all of it into an elevator pitch — the next phase after composing a logline — let alone in the pilot episode.

3} And here is my primary concern:? It seems to me that committing a crime while in a dream state gives the perpetrator an unmerited “get out of jail free” card.? Sure being denied the drug may hurt his career, but? isn’t going to jail because he was awake is worse?

It seems to me that committing a crime in a dream state should be an aggravating circumstance, not a mitigating one.? Just like DUI offenses (driving under the influence of alcohol)? are in the real world.? If a driver accidentally runs over someone while driving DUI, all other circumstances being equal, the legal system comes down harder — not easier– on the driver than if he had been stone sober.

There is a default sense of moral and legal justice hardwired into the human frontal cortex and limbic system.? And if the outputs from my frontal cortex and limbic system are typical, the fictional legal code of the story world just doesn’t compute rationally and more importantly, it doesn’t feel right.

In drama you have liberal creative license to play fast and loose with factual truth.? Which your concept does.? That’s okay.? But your concept can’t play fast and loose with emotional truth.? The plot, the characters, the events must all and always ring true emotionally.

Of course, I could be or should be writing this from a padded cell in an inane asylum.

It’s also possible I’ve completely misread your summary.? If so, then I refer back to point 2}; the concept may be too complicated, too easy to misunderstand.

Anyway, that’s my 2.5 cents worth.? I like the core concept of a series premised upon a state of consciousness we spend at least 1/4 of our lives in — 17.5 years of our minimally allotted 3 score and 10.? Best wishes in developing the series.