1. Posted: July 18, 2019In:

    After an outsider college clique finds that a young magic poet can write love poems that make every woman fall in love with them, they kidnap the guy, only to find out that real love has to be mutual.

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    I suggest the premise be re-engineered from top to bottom.It's not magic.? The poet has? a natural gift for writing poems that make women swoon.? But he is utterly tongue-tied in face-to-face encounters.He's not kidnapped.? Rather he monetizes his gift via a web service. He writes prose and poems foRead more

    I suggest the premise be re-engineered from top to bottom.

    It’s not magic.? The poet has? a natural gift for writing poems that make women swoon.? But he is utterly tongue-tied in face-to-face encounters.

    He’s not kidnapped.? Rather he monetizes his gift via a web service. He writes prose and poems for lonely hearts on web dating sites.? It’s a lucrative gig.

    And then (inciting incident) he falls hopelessly in love with one of women a client has hired him to woo.

    IOW: do an updated version of the Cyrano de Bergerac story.

    FWIW

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  2. Posted: April 23, 2019In:

    In a world where magic is determined by hair color and people with the same magic can temporarily share power, a yellow haired boy longs to be with his kind but discovers they have been divided by war with other magic types. After finally meeting others like him, he finds he can share power permanently and leaves to unite his people.

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    Seemingly explicit in the premise is that discrimination on the basis of hair color is normal, seemingly okay.Why is discrimination and tribal hostility on the basis of hair color okay in this reel world, when in the real world discrimination and ethnic rivalry on the basis of skin color isn't?Or isRead more

    Seemingly explicit in the premise is that discrimination on the basis of hair color is normal, seemingly okay.

    Why is discrimination and tribal hostility on the basis of hair color okay in this reel world, when in the real world discrimination and ethnic rivalry on the basis of skin color isn’t?

    Or is it? Please clarify.

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  3. Posted: July 17, 2019In:

    A bumptious young decorator inherits her uncle?s rental properties and must contend with city code enforcers while expanding her rental empire and becoming L.A.?s newest Slumlord.

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    For me, this logline raises an interesting question about framing.? Specifically, is there a difference between how a logline would frame the protagonist and how it would frame the objective goal?A logline frames, that is describes the protagonist, as the audience will see her, not as sees herself.?Read more

    For me, this logline raises an interesting question about framing.? Specifically, is there a difference between how a logline would frame the protagonist and how it would frame the objective goal?

    A logline frames, that is describes the protagonist, as the audience will see her, not as sees herself.? That is, in terms of her character flaw.? Which makes sense because the protagonist is initially in denial of? her flaw.? So it would be perfectly acceptable to define the protagonist in this logline as a slum lord.

    However, it seems to me that in a logline the objective goal should be framed in terms of how the protagonist sees the goal, not necessarily as the audience see it.? ?The objective goal should be framed in terms of what the protagonist intentionally seeks.

    In most cases, the audience would frame the objective goal in the same way . (Ripley’s objective goal to save Newt from the aliens.? That’s the way we, the audience, see it and we’re rooting for her to succeed.)? But there are exceptions; an audience may realize the protagonist is pursuing the wrong goal ( which is the case in this logline). Or the protagonist is pursuing the right goal for the wrong reasons.?

    To summarize, I am inclined to think that a logline should frame the protagonist as the audience sees her, but frame the objective goal as the protagonist sees it.

    So the question I have is:? does the protagonist see herself as a slum lord and her objective goal is to become intentionally an even more despicable one?? Is that what she knowingly, intentionally seeks? Or does she see herself as an ambitious, hard working entrepreneur providing a valuable and necessary product, one who is entitled to enjoy a fat profit margin because of the risks she’s taking and the hassles she has to endure dealing with petty, obstructionist bureaucrats?

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