thedarkhorse:

Beg to differ.? The uranium smuggling is not an insignificant element that can be omitted in the logline.? “Uranium” is a vital MacGuffin to the plot. To not reveal it is to make the mistake of? “hiding the game ball”, as Blake Snyder of “Save the Cat!’ fame phrased it.

At that point in post-WW2 history, there were two reasons for the existence of a secret post-war Nazi organization: 1] To enable Nazi’s wanted for war crimes to evade capture and justice; 2} To engage in a nefarious conspiracy of some sort.? ?Well, which is it?

The? logline line needs to indicate which of the two is pertinent to the plot and in the latter case, the object of the conspiracy.

Your new logline is 32 words long.? It can be trimmed.? For example, ‘socialite’ can go; it’s extraneous to the logline, less important to know than the nature of the conspiracy.

Based upon my understanding of the story, here’s my 21 word version:

In 1961, a British double agent teams up with the Nazi war criminal’s wife to thwart her husband’s uranium smuggling operation.