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When a drunk jingle writer repeatedly gets into bar fights, judge order him to anger management and mentor a trouble youth with a beautiful natural singing voice, if he doesn’t he will lose his income, family and go to jail.
Uh, the logline? is posted under Examples.? That is a category reserved for composing loglines for existing movies.What existing movie does this logline refer to?
Uh, the logline? is posted under Examples.? That is a category reserved for composing loglines for existing movies.
What existing movie does this logline refer to?
See lessPresumed dead, a vengeful old man uses his grandson as a vessel to help the police bust the cult that has destroyed his own life in order to save the human race.
As the others have said.I think the logline should focus on, be framed in terms of the character who is most in jeopardy, who has to take the greater risks.? In which case, it? seems the grandson should be cast as the protagonist, not the grandfather.Also, for the old man to want revenge -- okay,? tRead more
As the others have said.
I think the logline should focus on, be framed in terms of the character who is most in jeopardy, who has to take the greater risks.? In which case, it? seems the grandson should be cast as the protagonist, not the grandfather.
Also, for the old man to want revenge — okay,? that’s understandable.? But to? say that the fate of the human race is at stake seems over the top in terms of the stakes. Exactly how does the?cult pose a threat to the survival of all humanity?? What makes the cult so horrible?
And why would the grandson consent to be used as pawn by the grandfather?? What’s his motivation for putting his life in jeopardy?
See lessWhen his accidental time-travelling disrupts his parents’ first meeting, a teenager must get them to fall in love, before a historical lightning can reignite his time machine.
A great choice, giannisggeorgiou.? This is another challenging plot with a lot to unpack and explore.Here's my first cut:A teenager travels 30 years back in time where his mother-to-be falls fall in love with him. Now he has one week to make her fall in love with his father-to-be otherwise he won'tRead more
A great choice, giannisggeorgiou.? This is another challenging plot with a lot to unpack and explore.
Here’s my first cut:
A teenager travels 30 years back in time where his mother-to-be falls fall in love with him. Now he has one week to make her fall in love with his father-to-be otherwise he won’t exist in the future.
(38 words)
Most of the time, the standard practice to state the plot in one sentence.? But I elect to split this logline into two sentences because of? a distinguishing feature of time travel plots:? they entail paradox and rely upon counterfactual premises that can’t be crammed into a logline.? ? The logic just doesn’t compute.? By means of sleight of hand exposition the audience has to be persuaded to suspend disbelief and just go along for the ride.
As the character Older Joe says in “Looper”: “I don’t want to talk about time travel because if we start talking about it then we’re going to be here all day talking about it, making diagrams with straws.”
I also feel comfortable with splitting the logline into two sentences because each sentence contains a great story hook.
A teenager travels 30 years back in time where his mother-to-be falls fall in love with him.
Shades of Oedipus!? The first sentence sets up a situation that echoes back in time to Greek mythology, to Sophocle’s tragedy,? “Oedipus the King”. (Which, btw ,is the model for Aristotle’s theory of tragic drama as expounded in his “Poetics”.)
Okay, so the protagonist is placed in? compelling predicament.? What objective goal arises from it and what are the stakes?
Now he has one week to make her fall in love with his father-to-be otherwise he won’t exist in the future.
As to the why and wherefore? that he is under the pressure of a? “the ticking clock” to? achieve his objective goal,? there’s isn’t space to explain.? The logline is already? 38 words long.? Read the script.? Or better yet, watch the movie? Imho, the strength of the premise, a double story hook,? is more than sufficient to get the script read, the movie viewed without having to explain the logic.
(BTW:? How did I arrive at the “one week” ticking clock?? Marty, the teenage protagonist, goes back in time to? November 5, 1955.? The script sets up well beforehand a thunderbolt that will strike the town clock tower on November 12, 1955.? That thunderbolt will provide the time-travel DeLorean with the power needed to get back to the future-present.)
Finally, it will be remarked upon that the logline is way over the ideal logline maximum length of 25 words.? Indeed, it is.? But I suggest that it possible to get away with a long logline if and only if it contains a great story hook.? The logline for “Back to the Future” has two great story hooks.
fwiw
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