1. Posted: September 23, 2018In:

    An emotional wreck of a country singer must bring his daughter whom he has never met with him on tour, when her mother goes into rehab for a few weeks.

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    I can envision a story with , in effect (dare I say it? ), dual protagonists with a dual plot line.The singer needs to man up and take responsibility for the kid he sired -- but then abandoned. (To pursue his musical career as well as a lifestyle of one night stands, no permanent commitments.) The tRead more

    I can envision a story with , in effect (dare I say it? ), dual protagonists with a dual plot line.

    The singer needs to man up and take responsibility for the kid he sired — but then abandoned. (To pursue his musical career as well as a lifestyle of one night stands, no permanent commitments.) The teenager needs grow up and take responsibility for her actions instead of using her lousy parents as an? excuse for her immature behavior (like doing drugs).

    IOW:? a relationship story where each character needs to come to “terms of endearment” with the other in order to grow beyond their character flaws.

    But I don’t (yet) see that in the various iterations of the premise.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: September 23, 2018In:

    Famine in rural Ireland forces a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family. When the bond is broken he must choose between losing his child or his soul to settle his debt.

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    giannisggeorgiou:Re:>>>what is the action that drives Act II?As far as I can tell, the deeds the farmer performs and the consequences that follow from the terms of the contract? he made with the devilish spirit.? For eventually he has a change of heart.? I take "when the bond is broken" toRead more

    giannisggeorgiou:
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    >>>what is the action that drives Act II?

    As far as I can tell, the deeds the farmer performs and the consequences that follow from the terms of the contract? he made with the devilish spirit.? For eventually he has a change of heart.? I take “when the bond is broken” to mean he stops performing his end of the deal.

    It’s perfectly legitimate for a protagonist to make a wrong choice at the end of Act 1 and then have a change of heart later (either at the MPR? midpoint reversal) or end of Act 2.)? ?After which? the action and objective goal might shift into reverse gear.? (“Groundhog Day” is a good example.? In the 1st 1/2 of Act 2, Phil Connor’s objective goal is to exploit for personal gain and pleasure the fact that he’s time-trapped in?Punxsutawney, PA.? But after the MPR , his? objective goal and m.o. change: he uses the day to help others and learn new skills.)

    Anyway, like you I would like a clarification of the pact the farmer has made.? What is he supposed to do to fulfill his end of the bargain?? Worship the devilish spirit?? Or…?

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  3. Posted: September 23, 2018In:

    On the brink of a new type of technological and societal global war, a charismatic figure rises through the political sphere using Social Media as he faces adversity from those who would profit from a war succeeding.

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    >>>>he is a prophecized figure from the Bible. In my calculus, the most important element in a logline is the hook.? And in this story, the hook is that the advent of the protagonist is a fulfillment of Biblical prophesy.? It's the story element that makes the story stand out from otherRead more

    >>>>he is a prophecized figure from the Bible.

    In my calculus, the most important element in a logline is the hook.? And in this story, the hook is that the advent of the protagonist is a fulfillment of Biblical prophesy.? It’s the story element that makes the story stand out from other earth-going-to-hell-in-a-hand-basket scenarios? So it needs to be worked into the logline.

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