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Famine in rural Ireland forces a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family. When the bond is broken he must choose between losing his child or his soul to settle his debt.
My reading is:"Famine in rural Ireland forces" = inciting incident"a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family" = the protagonist's decision that sets the plot in motion.A concern here is we don't know what the dark deal is, what the father must do per the deRead more
My reading is:
“Famine in rural Ireland forces” = inciting incident
“a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family” = the protagonist’s decision that sets the plot in motion.
A concern here is we don’t know what the dark deal is, what the father must do per the deal he has made in the 1st half of Act 2 that enables him to feed his family.
“When the bond is broken”? = the MPR, the midpoint reversal.
“”he must choose between …” = the ultimate crisis, the central dramatic dilemma created by the plot.
It’s a classic deal-with-the-devil plot.? The farmer has made a Faustian bargain.? And all such bargains comes with fine print, a “gotcha” clause,? that the protagonist ignores, or discounts the possibility he will ever have to? deal with.? And initially,? it seems like a sweet deal.? The devil delivers on his end of the bargain… until the MPR? when the protagonist wants out of the contract.? But he can’t get out of it except at the terrible cost of losing what he loves most.
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Richiev's version is a good rewrite.But I think there are a couple of fundamental problems embedded in the premise.1] The dramatic premise?sets up a false conflict, a false dilemma.? A true dilemma is one where characters are faced with two equally desirable or two equally undesirable choices and thRead more
Richiev’s version is a good rewrite.
But I think there are a couple of fundamental problems embedded in the premise.
1] The dramatic premise?sets up a false conflict, a false dilemma.? A true dilemma is one where characters are faced with two equally desirable or two equally undesirable choices and they must choose one of them .
The choices in this premise, to cooperate or not to cooperate, are not equal.? So they don’t face a true dilemma.? When faced with? the immediate prospect of death, how realistic is it to believe that two people, of polar opposite political persuasions would not put their politics aside to work together to survive?
2] Loglines are about what characters consciously intend to do, not about unintended consequences that follow.? The two political foes don’t consciously intend to “re-examine their assumptions”;? that is an unintended consequence of having to work together to survive.
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Loglines are not about choices that ultimately have to be made late in the 2nd Act or the 3rd Act, dilemmas that have to be resolved one way or another.? Loglines are about? the plot -- the action, the conflict -- that follows from an initial choice made by the end of the 1st Act.? Period.? Full stoRead more
Loglines are not about choices that ultimately have to be made late in the 2nd Act or the 3rd Act, dilemmas that have to be resolved one way or another.? Loglines are about? the plot — the action, the conflict — that follows from an initial choice made by the end of the 1st Act.? Period.? Full stop.
The dilemma of having to choose between his soul or his child is the ulitmate crisis arising from the choice he made? at the end of Act 1 , the deal with the spiritual entity.? As such, the dilemma constitutes a spoiler.? Loglines should never contain a spoiler, should never reveal the ultimate crisis or how the plot plays out.? It should only disclose the basic details that set the plot in motion.
The plot in this logline is what happens after the father makes the deal with the pagan spirit.
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