1. Posted: September 23, 2018In:

    When clues from his friend’s disappearance lead to a high-class restaurant, an old hobo must save him from becoming part of the menu.

    dpg Singularity

    No one cares when homeless people start disappearing except a bag lady who follows clues to a popular new restaurant specializing in an exotic cuisine.(25 words)

    No one cares when homeless people start disappearing except a bag lady who follows clues to a popular new restaurant specializing in an exotic cuisine.

    (25 words)

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  2. Posted: September 5, 2018In:

    When a botched scientific experiment enables her to read minds, a reserved psychology student realises the intrusive burden of her ability and must discover how to reverse her gift to restore her normal life.

    dpg Singularity

    I'm a never-say-never guy, but mrliteral's rewrite is a good example of how to get around starting a logline with "when".? A practice,I agree, is overused.

    I’m a never-say-never guy, but mrliteral’s rewrite is a good example of how to get around starting a logline with “when”.? A practice,I agree, is overused.

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  3. Posted: September 22, 2018In:

    A simple disagreement in a gas station results in a store manager being brutally murdered. A dubious employee can’t accept the official explanation and asks one too many questions, sparking a series of events that could ruin him completely.

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    dpg Singularity

    >>>sparking a series of events that could ruin him completely. So, what does he do about it?? And what does "ruin" entail?? Is his life in mortal jeopardy?

    >>>sparking a series of events that could ruin him completely.

    So, what does he do about it?? And what does “ruin” entail?? Is his life in mortal jeopardy?

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