1. Posted: September 17, 2018In:

    A shy researcher in an isolated science station falls in love with the voice of his Russian counterpart, when he doesn’t hear from her for 24 hours he sets out across the tundra to find her.

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    And I don't see how "shy" works as a relevant character flaw.? It seems extraneous to the dramatic situation. A character flaw is relevant to the plot? and should only be included in a logline if it creates complications, if it threatens to defeat the protagonist from achieving the objective goal.?Read more

    And I don’t see how “shy” works as a relevant character flaw.? It seems extraneous to the dramatic situation.

    A character flaw is relevant to the plot? and should only be included in a logline if it creates complications, if it threatens to defeat the protagonist from achieving the objective goal.? How will his being shy threaten to defeat his attempt to save her life?

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  2. Posted: September 12, 2018In:

    When a mother realizes that her teenage son is tired of living, she must do something to get him off those dark thoughts before he acts on them.

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    1] Generations of Sicilians have fled the island because the poverty and corruption made it a place not worth living. So how will it be a place for the son to discover that life is worth living?2] The mother is only stage managing the plot; the son is the main character, the one who has to live it.Read more

    1] Generations of Sicilians have fled the island because the poverty and corruption made it a place not worth living. So how will it be a place for the son to discover that life is worth living?

    2] The mother is only stage managing the plot; the son is the main character, the one who has to live it. She is not in control of the outcome; he is. He is the pivotal character, the only one who can make the ultimate decision to live or die. So the logline ought to cast him as the protagonist.

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  3. Posted: September 11, 2018In:

    When a petty criminal encounters a “nightcrawler”, he will stop at nothing to become the most successful nightcrawler himself. – NIGHTCRAWLER

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    >>Why?The script was written by Dan Gilroy, one of the most connected and successful writer/directors in the biz.? ?Even so, he had hard time getting the script filmed because the protagonist is? an anti-hero character.? He succeeds by subverting? conventional ethics.? The encounter with a "niRead more

    >>Why?

    The script was written by Dan Gilroy, one of the most connected and successful writer/directors in the biz.? ?Even so, he had hard time getting the script filmed because the protagonist is? an anti-hero character.? He succeeds by subverting? conventional ethics.? The encounter with a “nightcrawler” is the inciting incident in that he discovers a profession he thinks he could be good at and one that would be far more lucrative than being a petty thief.

    And (spoiler) he is successful.? There is no reversal of fortune that leads to his downfall.? He doesn’t get his just desserts, doesn’t to pay for his misdeeds, his crimes.

    He’s not a sympathetic character.? But he is an intriguing one.? He’s pathologically perfect for the profession. for operating? in a working milieu, a fiercely competitive, cutthroat business.?

    And through the pathology of the character, Gilroy explores the pathology of? the profession.

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