1. Posted: April 9, 2018In:

    After a celebrity impersonator learns that both his wife and mistress are pregnant, he struggles with keeping the pregnancies secret. But after admitting to living an adulterous lifestyle, he winds up as a vagrant without hope of ever rebuilding his life.

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    Agree with variable's points.? Particularly that covering up the pregnancies doesn't work as an objective goal because it's negative.? Objectives goals are positive, proactive. (At least positive from the protagonist's point of view.? It could play out that it's the wrong goal, but at the time he maRead more

    Agree with variable’s points.? Particularly that covering up the pregnancies doesn’t work as an objective goal because it’s negative.? Objectives goals are positive, proactive. (At least positive from the protagonist’s point of view.? It could play out that it’s the wrong goal, but at the time he makes it — at the turn of Act1 — he believes it’s positive in terms of his self-interest.)

    >>>he winds up as a vagrant without hope of ever rebuilding his life.

    Is this denouement, how he ends up?? If so it’s a spoiler, and a logline should never contain a spoiler, how the story ends.? If it’s not where does it belong in the plot?? Is it a midpoint reversal?

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  2. Posted: April 8, 2018In:

    A vengeful young woman with a grudge about being conceived by anonymous sperm donation tracks down her biological father, who is now a successful gynaecologist, and plots with her scheming mother to take the place of his wife and daughter.

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    A protagonist doesn't' have to be sympathetic.? But she has to be interesting.? ?The character has to draw you into her world, her wild and crazy pov.??I? suggest that the character in this story be described for what she is, that your logline be an invitation for a script reader to go on a journeyRead more

    A protagonist doesn’t’ have to be sympathetic.? But she has to be interesting.? ?The character has to draw you into her world, her wild and crazy pov.??I? suggest that the character in this story be described for what she is, that your logline be an invitation for a script reader to go on a journey into a heart of darkness of a psychopath.

    My first response was to try to normalize the story — hence, I tilted toward reworking it from the victim’s point of view.? But if you? are intent on telling? with her as the protagonist, then I think any attempt to normalize the story would only dilute the character.? ?What made “America Psycho” so? compelling is that? the story is told entirely from the pov of the psycho.? We enter his mind, his custom styled insane asylum.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: April 8, 2018In:

    Edited: When an seasoned womanizer transforms his female best friend from a clinger to a player and finds himself attracted to his new creation, but realizes the repercussions of his teachings is worst than he imagined.

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    dpg Singularity

    Well said Valentin.? I agree with you on ever point.? Especially on the point about the temper of the times in the movie industry, the #MeToo and #TimesUp movements.? It's time to flip the trope, the Pygmalion? plot, so that it's a woman who gives a man a make over, transforms him into a player.

    Well said Valentin.? I agree with you on ever point.? Especially on the point about the temper of the times in the movie industry, the #MeToo and #TimesUp movements.?

    It’s time to flip the trope, the Pygmalion? plot, so that it’s a woman who gives a man a make over, transforms him into a player.

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