Catydid52:

Your logline has been rattling around in my skull (a good thing!) because I find the kernel of the premise promising. ?That is, my mind is hooked on the notion of a shape shifting protagonist.

However:

Taking your version at face value, it seems as if the story opens with the protagonist already in full shape shifter mode. ?Her magical ability just magically appears in the 1st Act like a rabbit being pulled out of a hat. ?And then complications ensue.

However, I would like to suggest that it might be more dramatically interesting and emotionally effective if the arc of the plot utilized the paradigm of the “Hero’s Journey”. ?In that paradigm: Act 1: She discovers her potential to shape shift… ?Act 2: She must learn to use her emergent power well and wisely even as her nascent ability provokes conflict with her nemesis, the witch doctor. ?A conflict which escalates to… Act 3: A life or death struggle High Noon showdown with her nemesis which is the supreme test of her power.

Maybe you have that kind of story arc in mind. ?if so, ?I don’t see it reflected in the logline. ?Whatever, my point is that the ?the logline would have stronger appeal if it ?suggested a “Hero’s Journey” framework for the plot.

Two excellent examples of this story arc can be found in the origin stories that launched the “Star Wars” and “Harry Potter” franchises. ?The franchises have been so popular and commercially successful because the films aren’t just about characters with magical powers. ?The films are about characters who must learn to use their powers they have been gifted with. ?And learn through setbacks and suffering.

fwiw